高考英语满分英语作文示范(2)

　　本文内在逻辑性很强，由远及近。由外及内，层次分明，错落有致。同时让步状语从句运用得恰到好处，很出彩，再则结构完整，从开头的问候语到结尾都很完备。
Dear Bob,
　　I’m so glad that you are coming to learn Chinese here. I’ve already found you a house near our school. I’d like to tell you something about it.
　　You may get on No.ll bus at Fang Cao Street and the next stop is just Jian Xin Chinese School. The house is near the school. It is about 25 square metres. In the bedroom, there is a bed, a sofa standing against the wall and a table near the window. You may find a light on the table and a chair next to it. There are two other rooms connecting the bedroom. The left one is a bathroom and the right one is a kitchen. So you may cook by yourself. The rent for the house is 500 yuan per month.
　　Hope you’ll enjoy staying here!
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 Yours,
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 Li Hua

满分理由

　　本文内容具体，详略得当，表述方式很有创造力和新意，长短句并用，语言结构富于变化，错落有致，顺畅圆润，尤其是情态动词和分词的运用很独到，为文章增色不少。

作文：
 Dear Bob,
　　I’m glad to hear from you.
　　Welcome to our city in september. I’ve found a suitable house for you.
　　The house is on Fang Cao Street, not far from the Jianxin Chinese School. If you take the No.11 bus, it is just one stop.
　　It is a flat on the third floor of a building. It has three rooms, a living-room, a bathroom and a kitchen. You can cook yourself. The mirror, the basin and the bathtub are very convenient for you. In the living-room, there is a bed, a sofa and a desk with chair. The desk is next to the window. It will be good for study. The total size is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan a month.
　　Will you be satisfied with this flat, or you want another one? Just let me know. I’ll try my best to help you.
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 Yours,
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 Li Hua

满分理由
　　本文内容详实，描述具体细腻，用词适当准确，如“suitable house”、“not far from’’等，另外文中的选择疑问句也很有新意。