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戒烟日-A Memorable Day(2)

时间:2014-12-09 09:54来源:乐学点击:字体:[ ]

As the sinking sun tinted the horizon, we began to count the cigarette ends, savoring our little victories.
That day saw me toiling for 6 hours, inviting loads of troubles, collecting 57 cigarette-ends,savoring hundreds of potential second hand smokers and developing for myself some sense of responsibility toward society.
Though it was a little depressing to realize that those people would naturally pick up their "tradition" just where they had temporarily laid it down, yet how far can we estimate our actions would travel! And besides that, I was rewarded in another day.That is, the experience dawned upon me the significance of care and consideration for other people. Since then, I have been as cooperative as possible whenever I am asked to improve my public behavior and I am always ready to get involved in such volunteer work.
In a sense, the highest reward for ones toil is not what they get from it but what they become by it.

简 评
吸烟有害,这个道理妇孺皆知,况且吸烟不仅对自己有害,还危及他人的健康。于是有了“戒烟日”。然而,劝人戒烟是辛苦的工作,例如作者所付出的努力。
作者有着很强的语言驾驭力,文字优美准确,意思表达到位,例如:“Embracing the philosophy of‘nothing ventured,nothing gained,,we summoned up a11 our courage,...”;“And l further found out that for this man,such words as‘good for your
health,...had long lost their appeal.”;“As the sinking sun timted the horizon,...”等等。
但在第二个例子的描述上,有些地方叙述有待商榷,例如:“In fact,you are extinguishing one cell Of lung cancer when you extinguish your cigarette.Youare extinguishing one cell“the disease Of selfishness when yOU extinguish your cigarette.”叙述重复,意思不很明朗。对此,作者似乎还可做进一步的修改。
总体说来,作者出彩的文字运用使本文的可读性很强。


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